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    manofspacebob - Synthetic Application

    Synthetic Whitelist Application
    Personal Information

    Byond ID?
    manofspacebob

    Discord ID?
    C Brando#2358

    Marine Name
    Bob Manly and way lesser known Hank Jebediah Joyce

    Other Whitelist Applications
    N/A

    Character Information

    Name of the Synth Character you wish to play
    Titus

    What is your Synthetic's Personality?
    Titus is a charismatic storyteller, a stalwart teacher and a keen observer of the situations around him.

    The appearance of outward Charisma was programmed into him to help further ease tension in somewhat precarious situations. De-escalation can quickly save lives just as fast as a hemostat applied in the right set of skilled hands. A good story or quick-quip to garner one's attention or chuckle can go a lot further than negative reinforcement might, given a situation.

    Being stalwart is odd because it is expected of a synthetic to be reliable. However, given Titus’ background, (see Titus Character story below) being loyal, reliable and hardworking in all things including instruction makes Titus approachable as opposed to stand offish or aloof as some synthetics may seem to some marines.

    Observational skills is one thing that is often overlooked when a person considers what a synthetic is because it is plainly assumed. A synthetic is supposed to be situationally aware-of-everything-all-the-time. It is then assumed that a synthetic is merely observing facts that are presented to it and then making an informed decision based on the information that lay before them. One example that differentiates Titus would be at the simplest level; a conversation. In most conversations between two people one, if not both, are merely waiting for their turn to speak. Titus is not just waiting for his turn to speak… He asks pertinent follow up questions even if they are worded simply. This helps Titus appear more sincere, allows for him to gauge intent/tone/inflection of the conversation even if the marine speaking with him might be ESL.

    Why do you want to be a synthetic/why should we whitelist you?
    I find that I prefer roleplay/assisting other players more interesting and satisfying than trying to be the best at storming the castle.

    A vast majority of my time, if not all, has been spent in support roles. Of my 600+ hours as PFC almost 90% percent has been spent in bravo at the fob. One SEA called Bob a support-marine… because until recently Bob only carried one firearm and a sensormate. Bob’s typical loadout had been to carry more rolls of gauze, roller beds, tricord, splints and food then he had ammo/explosives. From there, I kept branching out further and further into more support roles. Each one became more challenging and more personally rewarding as I began to figure them out.

    A lesson learned a long time ago for me, is that sometimes it is not always what is happening on a center stage that is the most important thing occurring. But, rather, what might be more important are the critical support roles happening right behind the curtain that allow for that act to take the center stage...

    What is your most memorable interaction with a synthetic?
    I had a round a very long time ago where the marines were on LV. Bob was in bravo, the front collapsed. We had a breach in the north fob and the queen with her merry band of xenos were pouring in. Clarke the synthetic was gathering wounded marines into the DS as fast as they could. I took Bob and got behind an M56d and was determined to buy the marines more time. Rather than leave Bob behind, Clarke took the time to talk Bob down and posit that it was in fact better for Bob to get in the DS. Afterwards Clarke reminded Bob that it was a team effort! Making sure to use “We” in their statements.

    Up until then, I had never even really seen any synthetic do that or had one give my character the time of day with that sort of interaction. It was an awesome roleplay interaction that occurred. It was fun and super memorable.

    Synthetic Character Story
    The link below refers to the synthetic back story of Titus. The link contains information about the design, creation and odd business collaboration between two large corporations in an attempt to generate profit. There are several supporting characters that are used to further flush out the main protagonist within the story which is Titus.

    I made an attempt to make the story as least distracting as possible while still attempting to have the story emphasize who and what Titus is. At the very end of the story itself is an image that I created to further help the reader and their mind's eye capture who and what Titus looks like.


    https://docs.google.com/document/d/1...it?usp=sharing

    Experience

    How familiar are you with Engineering?
    I am very familiar with engineering. I can build airlocks, repair apcs, lathes, repair the late apc, new tcomms and old tcomms alike. I still enjoy wandering around in observer/ghost mode and looking at the maps/Alamayer and thinking of things to tinker with or possibly create.

    I can load the OB as an MT.

    How familiar are you with Command?
    I am lacking in the command area. I understand the consoles and their jobs but I have not spent too much time in there since the changes a while back to have the hours counted as they are.

    How familiar are you with Medical?
    I am very familiar with CM medical. Now, it’s like being in bravo to me. I know all of the surgeries and have learned the “ghetto” surgeries. Though, I still prefer to use the proper tools for expediency as that is where most of my muscle memory is.

    I have had ops where I have been the only doctor to wake up. In those ops I have run the chemlines, set up medbay and never let any marines perma that were brought to medbay. In those ops specifically I worked diligently with the medics to explain it was only “Bob” awake and we were to triage each marine accordingly. It was fun and worked really well!

    How familiar are you with Requisitions?
    I am very familiar with Req and have run req more than a handful of times without an RO or another CT. If there is no RO or CT I have then requested transfer to Req to run the lines and send supplies down to the fob to help further facilitate the flow of things for the marines groundside. I understand the nuances of when not to over order on low pop and when to wait in high pop rounds for the right time to begin to deliver extra specialist ammo/materials etc…

    What are some scenarios that you can perform combat in? Give us a brief example.
    Synthetics are not allowed to “go-ham”. A scenario that always plays out is the runner/lurker/burrower/Vampire(now) trying to capture a marine. If Titus were attempting to render aid to a marine and the marine were to be pounced on by a runner Titus is allowed to strike it in an attempt to scare it off. Titus would not be allowed to chase it down and kill the runner. If the runner continued to be persistent Titus should first request marines aid them at their location and then be more assertive with his stance in regards to defending the marine/striking the runner. However, if that runner were to go into crit as a result from this combat? Titus would step back and return to the marine; not killing the runner.
    Adding to that aforementioned scenario: if marines arrive to give cover fire, Titus would again disengage and continue to render aid to the wounded marine. It is not Titus' role to be a combatant. That role is for the marines.

    Combat synthetics are frowned upon and are only allowed in extra special one-off events.

    Confirmations

    Are you familiar with the Synthetic Programming and Guidelines?
    Yes

    Have you read the application process page?
    Yes

    Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or the Synthetic Programming Guideline?
    Yes

    Do you understand that you cannot advertise your application on any platform for votes. Do you also understand you may not edit this application 1 hour after it has been posted?
    Yes

    Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason? Do you have any active jobbans?
    No

    Are you currently banned from our Discord, and if so, why?
    No

    Discord Ban Reason
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    Do you have anything else you would like to include about your application?
    I know I do not have the hours that some other older players might have but I believe in myself and my mastery of the skills that have been presented.

    This application has been a very long time in the making for me. I have a very special appreciation for CM as my reasons for continuing on this long road are personal.Those of us who grew up watching the Aliens franchise IP grow beyond the first two movies understand how great of thing ss13:CM is. To me, just having an opportunity to partake in something like this would have blown my mind away as a kid.

    My story was originally a collection of timestamps and odd conversations. I have revamped it to read like a story, including a rendering I made of Titus, along with the appearance of an internal WY-Seegson document.

    I look forward to hearing feedback on my application. Thank you all for taking the time to read this.
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    Attaboy!

    Hello Manly, looks like you have a good understanding of the rules involving the role and possibly the skill and capability of exercising it properly. Although, I've been thinking to myself: Do your synthetic's name have a background? What you have right now is a diamond and it still needs better carving, the personality on itself doesn't lack, but I think that you could add more to it. The name "Titus" Immediately remembered me of Josip Tito, A Communist Revolutionary of the now nonexistent Yugoslavia, he and his charisma were the only things that held the country together, and when he died, the country separated to what it is now.
    Your character's photo doesn't only share a "hidden" charisma but also seriousness, keeping an eye on anything that pops out, but...I believe something lacks, why such a secret and unique synthetic made by Seegson with the purpose of beating Weyland-Yutani's third generation synthetics would have such appeal for the charisma and for the handling of situations?
    My advice is that, to add to the character better, you could look at the Historical Figure I mentioned and...maybe fill the gaps that are missing here and there.

    I would give a +1, but because of those holes, I may wait for the rest of the people to share their opinion. In the meanwhile, you could develop the points I've talked about.

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    I'll put my two cents in, prefacing it by saying that you clearly put a lot of effort in the app and it shows, we need more applicants like you.

    On the synthetic itself I have no problems with it and I like the mix of personality / backround from the story, I wish you would have written a small sentence about its concept on the app itself, because it's an interesting take which goes into "How were the defects of working Joes adressed and what would it evolve to?", and that can give others more of an idea of how the Synthetic is without having to read the story, I can picture how you would play it out ingame and I do trust you with it because I see this as taking the strengths from your marine character into the synthetic, you're always very engaged to anyone willing to have a conversation with you no matter how small and I know you'll keep that up.

    Generally I'd be a bit worried about gameplay knowledge, but in this case I know exactly who I'm talking about, you cover the bases and while your confidence seems a bit lacking at times (unsure if that's just a quirk of your marine), I can tell you'll find a way to somehow solve the problems you can come across as synth which is what really matters, I know you got your RP down and I like the way you really focus on those aspects that are generally neglected (casual conversations ingame, focus on the FOB without it feeling as an obligation you have to rush), but never forget being a synthetic is about being in control of those situations and someone trusted to have a grip, that's why I want to ask you these questions before I vote.

    1- You arrive at second drop and realize the state of the FOB is like this https://imgur.com/a/XB3Pl1b, with infighting between bravo and a delta engineer that both have their "visions" on how the fob should be is happening, guns are drawn and they keep deconstructing what the other is doing, at :35 command is asking you to fix it, what do you do?

    2- You're near the front with the CO, comms go out and he orders someone to fix it without pointing to anyone in particular, a few wounded are piling up, what do you consider priority in this situation and how would you go at it?

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    Attaboy!

    Hello Manly, looks like you have a good understanding of the rules involving the role and possibly the skill and capability of exercising it properly. Although, I've been thinking to myself: Do your synthetic's name have a background? What you have right now is a diamond and it still needs better carving, the personality on itself doesn't lack, but I think that you could add more to it. The name "Titus" Immediately remembered me of Josip Tito, A Communist Revolutionary of the now nonexistent Yugoslavia, he and his charisma were the only things that held the country together, and when he died, the country separated to what it is now.
    Your character's photo doesn't only share a "hidden" charisma but also seriousness, keeping an eye on anything that pops out, but...I believe something lacks, why such a secret and unique synthetic made by Seegson with the purpose of beating Weyland-Yutani's third generation synthetics would have such appeal for the charisma and for the handling of situations?
    My advice is that, to add to the character better, you could look at the Historical Figure I mentioned and...maybe fill the gaps that are missing here and there.

    I would give a +1, but because of those holes, I may wait for the rest of the people to share their opinion. In the meanwhile, you could develop the points I've talked about.
    No idea where this comes from, Titus is a fine name, the backround of the synthetic is very laid out in the story and linking it with a Working Joe goes a way to explain the personality, I suggest reading it.
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    Quote Originally Posted by LCMS1 View Post
    Attaboy!

    Hello Manly, looks like you have a good understanding of the rules involving the role and possibly the skill and capability of exercising it properly. Although, I've been thinking to myself: Do your synthetic's name have a background? What you have right now is a diamond and it still needs better carving, the personality on itself doesn't lack, but I think that you could add more to it. The name "Titus" Immediately remembered me of Josip Tito, A Communist Revolutionary of the now nonexistent Yugoslavia, he and his charisma were the only things that held the country together, and when he died, the country separated to what it is now.
    Your character's photo doesn't only share a "hidden" charisma but also seriousness, keeping an eye on anything that pops out, but...I believe something lacks, why such a secret and unique synthetic made by Seegson with the purpose of beating Weyland-Yutani's third generation synthetics would have such appeal for the charisma and for the handling of situations?
    My advice is that, to add to the character better, you could look at the Historical Figure I mentioned and...maybe fill the gaps that are missing here and there.

    I would give a +1, but because of those holes, I may wait for the rest of the people to share their opinion. In the meanwhile, you could develop the points I've talked about.
    Hello, thank you for the kind words and the constructive feedback on my application. I have given a little thought to your questions and answered them below.

    Do your synthetic's name have a background?

    Yes, Titus was a Roman Emperor who reigned for a very short time. Only: 24 June 79 – 13 September 81. He was known for some military achievements but he was more known for his empathetic response to natural disasters that happened during his reign. The most notable were the volcanic eruption of Mount Vesuvius and a conflagration that burned a large portion of Rome. The former being the volcanic activity that buried Pompeii. His response was quite different given the time period he lived in. He also oversaw the completion of several of Rome’s larger standing structures like the Colosseum.

    Your character's photo doesn't only share a "hidden" charisma but also seriousness, keeping an eye on anything that pops out, but...I believe something lacks, why such a secret and unique synthetic made by Seegson with the purpose of beating Weyland-Yutani's third generation synthetics would have such appeal for the charisma and for the handling of situations?


    I tried very hard to express that Titus was Weyland-Yutani/Seegson joint conglomeration to create a synthetic that was many steps in a different direction than a Working Joe. In fact, not a Working Joe at all. In my short background story for Titus, I wrote about the two corporate executives discussing old advertisements about Titus and how the corporations each sought out ways to eke out more profits from this joint venture. Seegson, perhaps desperate to find a way back into a better standing within the synthetic market and Weyland Yutani seeing a potential way to further leverage a rival corporation. I enjoyed writing all of this out and maybe someday I will write more about the corporate side of things within this little short story.

    Hope that helps. : )

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    Quote Originally Posted by lcarapaica View Post
    I'll put my two cents in, prefacing it by saying that you clearly put a lot of effort in the app and it shows, we need more applicants like you.

    On the synthetic itself I have no problems with it and I like the mix of personality / backround from the story, I wish you would have written a small sentence about its concept on the app itself, because it's an interesting take which goes into "How were the defects of working Joes adressed and what would it evolve to?", and that can give others more of an idea of how the Synthetic is without having to read the story, I can picture how you would play it out ingame and I do trust you with it because I see this as taking the strengths from your marine character into the synthetic, you're always very engaged to anyone willing to have a conversation with you no matter how small and I know you'll keep that up.

    Generally I'd be a bit worried about gameplay knowledge, but in this case I know exactly who I'm talking about, you cover the bases and while your confidence seems a bit lacking at times (unsure if that's just a quirk of your marine), I can tell you'll find a way to somehow solve the problems you can come across as synth which is what really matters, I know you got your RP down and I like the way you really focus on those aspects that are generally neglected (casual conversations ingame, focus on the FOB without it feeling as an obligation you have to rush), but never forget being a synthetic is about being in control of those situations and someone trusted to have a grip, that's why I want to ask you these questions before I vote.

    1- You arrive at second drop and realize the state of the FOB is like this https://imgur.com/a/XB3Pl1b, with infighting between bravo and a delta engineer that both have their "visions" on how the fob should be is happening, guns are drawn and they keep deconstructing what the other is doing, at :35 command is asking you to fix it, what do you do?

    2- You're near the front with the CO, comms go out and he orders someone to fix it without pointing to anyone in particular, a few wounded are piling up, what do you consider priority in this situation and how would you go at it?



    No idea where this comes from, Titus is a fine name, the backround of the synthetic is very laid out in the story and linking it with a Working Joe goes a way to explain the personality, I suggest reading it.
    Hello,
    Thank you for taking the time to read my application and the backstory I have written for the hypothetical synthetic “Titus”. I appreciate the constructive criticism and feedback about this application along with the observations of the marine I play on CM.

    1- You arrive at second drop and realize the state of the FOB is like this https://imgur.com/a/XB3Pl1b, with infighting between bravo and a delta engineer that both have their "visions" on how the fob should be is happening, guns are drawn and they keep deconstructing what the other is doing, at :35 command is asking you to fix it, what do you do?

    Yikes, it is at minute :35 and this is the fob! We have some work to do.

    Titus would view this situation with the utmost urgency. Defusing the verbal confrontation before it becomes physical! The first thing Titus would do is immediately approach the engineers and engage in a conversation.

    Approaching the Bravo Engineer: “A Yin. You are the earth, the wind and the moon.”
    The Delta Engineer: “A Yang. You are strong, the fire and the sky.”
    Based on time: Titus would *gesture to his arm towards the sky.

    When they both go “what???”

    I would explain that we must take heed in our measures and cooperate. Otherwise, if there were any enemy combatants then the fob would surely fail before it began.

    To the Bravo Engineer: I would explain to them the first row of cades must be placed here. 1. Seals the fob with three plasteel cades or their metal cade door counterpart whichever they have the materials for. 2. Time permitting to move that row of cades back one tile. IF time permits. This is based on a lot of hours of getting slashed from around a corner by a lurker/anything larger.

    To the Delta Engineer: I would explain that they are to fix the exterior of the fob by placing cades in these areas outlined in blue. In the past I have taken Bob and physically marched his sprite out slowly, even counting to “Five” over tiles to illustrate the spacing to new marines in new roles. In this instance I may point and move Titus over the spaces if there is any confusion.

    The green is where I would move Titus and begin immediately building barricades and barricade doors. I would then maneuver Titus to place wire over any barricades that are not currently wired.

    Assuming that the rest of the fob is indeed buttoned up I would explain to Both engineers that I would be disassembling anything that we did not reuse. Items marked in “x” that did not get reused would get deconstructed based on time. This would provide us with more materials in the event things go south out on the front.

    https://imgur.com/l9CtnAL

    Now to explain the way Titus spoke, these two engineers are disagreeing no doubt about the same thing. The protection of the fob and its further development. Neither is wrong. The only thing amiss is that their judgment has become clouded and their priorities have run amiss. Arguing only further prevents progress and brings with it inevitable doom.

    I was struck by the visual dynamic of the two players; the Bravo Engineer and the Delta Engineer. Titus would view this as a taijitu symbol and that symbolism to further convey his message. The two engineers are symbolic of one another. One, the foundation point of which all marines leave and all marines return albeit alive or dead; the fob(s) of Bravo. The other is hot like fire, quick to become aggressive and moves like the sky; with the maximum effort of Delta. Hence the distractionary conversation to potentially reset the priorities.


    2- You're near the front with the CO, comms go out and he orders someone to fix it without pointing to anyone in particular, a few wounded are piling up, what do you consider priority in this situation and how would you go at it?

    This is a tough call but communications are critical for any deployment in any theater on any operation. Communication would have to be the priority. If the CO cannot send messages out, cannot call for reinforcements, cannot call in mortar fire/CAS/OB and or essentially extend their sphere of influence?... then the op will be over like a land speed record out on a salt flat in Utah; quick and dirty. However, wounded piling up would cause mayhem as well. I would approach this in a couple of ways:

    Titus would express to the CO that he shall go re-establish comms and quickly scan for a radio telephone pack if Titus were not already wearing one. This is a two fold thought process in and of itself. 1. It would allow Titus to inform the CO, via RTO’s that are around the CO, of any changes along the backlines on his way to tcomms location. This information would keep the CO aware of any enemy combatants in the backlines, potentially wounded personnel along the way and or any other high value opportunity that may present itself IE the possibility of a flank. 2. It would allow Titus to remain situationally aware through the marine’s communications with one another.

    Before leaving Titus would scan to see if there are any medics nearby? If there are, Titus would encourage the medics to drag the wounded back from the front lines so they can treat and triage accordingly. Then Titus would tell them he is headed to re-establish comms. It's a short n’ fast thing to do. To quickly look around, shout and leave. Many veteran players will already know this anyway and perhaps become cranky or grumpy… However, there are always a few new medic players that might need this reminder and its suggestion may spurn them into action which may save more marine lives. This allows the medics to work in a “safer” environment and allows the marines a chance to get back on their feet and have the meds on board to run their course within them.
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    Manly.

    When I asked if the character's name had a background, I meant: How the name you took fits with your character, what makes him "Titus". When I talked about "Josip Tito", it was because your character and that historic figure have something in common: A very good charismatic figure. That's the type of hole I was talking about, the thing needs more...glue, understand? And your answer still didn't answered my question: What made the personality of Titus be what it is? Im not talking about his manufacturing, Im talking about his design.

    I believe the character you created is too complex to have such a shallow name or lack a origin for his personality. Titus was the emperor of rome on his olden days, as so, what is the correlation between him and your synthetic?
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    E: Mason, message me side line of all of this. I’ll further explain. Thanks.
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    Firstly I would like to preface that the amount of effort being put forth is frankly shocking. That said, unless it was done truly because you enjoy it, a lot of it is wasted. This is a good case where there may be quality material, but it's so hidden among an absolute novel quantity that it's working against itself. To break into sections.

    1- We aim to have synthetics with consistent personality and character. While you have this big chunk of explanation about the personality, the only thing that really sets the character apart is as a storyteller. However during the story the character seems to be jumping between playing the part of several different characters as part of their storyteller role. I may be missing some detail in the picture but I had to resort to control+f and searching for Titus in order to even find that the 5th of 16 pages was where he came into the story supposed to showcase their interactions.

    2- There are major lore issues. The Seegson Working Joe is to WY like how Panasonic toughbook is to Microsoft. Never heard of toughbooks? Probably because in comparison, they're ants. Microscopic nobodies in a niche market for "rugged and reliable" and don't really even do that very well, whereas mega Microsoft dominates the computing market. WY has no reason to collaborate with Seegson, and in fact WY casually drove them out of business and purchased what few assets they deemed valuable when they went bankrupt.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Katskan View Post
    Firstly I would like to preface that the amount of effort being put forth is frankly shocking. That said, unless it was done truly because you enjoy it, a lot of it is wasted. This is a good case where there may be quality material, but it's so hidden among an absolute novel quantity that it's working against itself. To break into sections.

    1- We aim to have synthetics with consistent personality and character. While you have this big chunk of explanation about the personality, the only thing that really sets the character apart is as a storyteller. However during the story the character seems to be jumping between playing the part of several different characters as part of their storyteller role. I may be missing some detail in the picture but I had to resort to control+f and searching for Titus in order to even find that the 5th of 16 pages was where he came into the story supposed to showcase their interactions.

    2- There are major lore issues. The Seegson Working Joe is to WY like how Panasonic toughbook is to Microsoft. Never heard of toughbooks? Probably because in comparison, they're ants. Microscopic nobodies in a niche market for "rugged and reliable" and don't really even do that very well, whereas mega Microsoft dominates the computing market. WY has no reason to collaborate with Seegson, and in fact WY casually drove them out of business and purchased what few assets they deemed valuable when they went bankrupt.
    Hello,

    Didn’t realize at the time that the SEA wasn’t a WL holder.

    1. Thank you for taking the time to read that and I did put a lot of effort into it. I’m not tracking the control-f part of your statement but since I did not know who will be reading this short story I had assume the audience did not know anything of setting. Because if I make assumptions… you know the old saying… but since you skipped ahead and didn’t read the story, your answer is uh?… weird. I edited this a few times to be polite but I’ll write it out: Titus plays out a re-enactment of an event that already occurred. The others are supporting characters… legit Titus is a story teller. People like stories.

    2. Uh, well, as far continuity goes we are talking about a fictional “what-if” piece and I never stated it was canon. It can be amended. Also, I have heard of tough books, used them and they got the job done. They aren’t/weren’t great but they did what they needed to do. We didn’t complain because we weren’t the ones in control of ordering them! ……but…. Seegson didn’t get bought out by WY. Sevastopol station and its assets did.

    You mention ants… I think that’s funny and a really good analogy. Ant colonies are full of workers and in some cases the baseline worker cannot perform the task at hand. So, the colony will create specialized castes to perform the task… hopefully you are tracking what I’m putting down with the analogy! You answered what I have written in my short story! Damn, that’s awesome!

    Thank you for taking the time to respond. I appreciate the feedback.
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    Some quick criticism on a few points I want to touch:

    Quote Originally Posted by manofspacebob View Post
    Approaching the Bravo Engineer: “A Yin. You are the earth, the wind and the moon.”
    The Delta Engineer: “A Yang. You are strong, the fire and the sky.”
    Based on time: Titus would *gesture to his arm towards the sky.
    This type of dialogue doesn't seem too like what Titus on the story made me think he would be, I understand what you want to do with it, but as a conversation starter you will have difficulty keeping players' attention. The fob you linked will do considering the situation and time, what's really valuable is how you handle people.

    Quote Originally Posted by manofspacebob View Post
    Then Titus would tell them he is headed to re-establish comms. It's a short n’ fast thing to do. To quickly look around, shout and leave.
    Being aware of your surroundings before leaving is good, but recognize that the task you have to accomplish isn't always as easy, a synthetic will be expected to secure it and ensure it doesn't go down again, this is not a task they can do alone if they engage more than one xeno on the way so don't ever be afraid of asking for help, which in turn will lead to more RP opportunities.

    Quote Originally Posted by Katskan View Post
    This is a good case where there may be quality material, but it's so hidden among an absolute novel quantity that it's working against itself. To break into sections.
    I'm hard pressed to agree, I feel you need to take a step back, realize the core of what you want to do and go with it, I won't comment on the lore stuff, that's an easy fix if anything and inconsequential. You have a lot of potential but as Katskan says, you really have to polish your idea, your execution and your answers here down to what is essential, make it easier to digest for everyone and you will surely get more support.

    I will +1 it, you have the knowledge, you take the role seriously and it shows but there is a thing as taking it too seriously and I feel that's hurting you here.

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