Ok I read the story, thankfully it was well written and kept my attention. I was just considering making you cut it down to half the size, but I respected the effort you put into it. No one here likes to read long stories for a whitelist. The limit for these stories is usually like 2k words at most. You're a great writer, but for any other application don't write that much.
Now onto the story: it was great. But is also raises some concerns.
Your synthetic breaks guidelines in the story. Can you tell me which ones and how would you go about fixing it?
Why did you write a story about a synthetic just straight up not being loyal to the marines?