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Thread: LynuahSororitas - Synthetic Application

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    Quote Originally Posted by Jakkkk View Post
    -1.

    I have nothing else to add.
    Well I'm going to put a -1 aswell. I think you aren't ready yet.

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    Anything to add? Tips?
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    The story was short and didn't really portray your synthetic well. I have no idea what her personality is like other than she's curious. The way you also described her didn't feel synthetic at all, but human. Using words like feeling, being fascinated, understanding is not a vocabulary you should be using to describe synths.

    I don't mind the quirk, but you should focus on trying to portray your synths personality more. You also didn't demonstrate how your synth would talk to other humans, which is a shame. For your next try make sure to give me a glimpse of how your synthetic talks to others, not just to herself. And avoid writing her so human. And make sure to grind out these support roles.

    You can reapply in a month.
    Former staff, also former Synthetic senator.

    Now just a shitposter and lurker.

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