I've been helping/advising Kira on their synth app for a bit, and have shared some of my concerns with them in DMs beforehand. As such, I would also like to vocally express my concerns regarding your english skills, as @
DriedMilk has done above.
The story has issues with grammar. Past and present tenses are used all over the place, without consistency. You start out with present, i.e. the story is happening NOW, then switch to past tense, i.e. it happened some time ago, then go back to present and so on. This happens throughout the story. There are also mistakes with spelling and such.
Once again, I already told you of these concerns beforehand, in Discord DMs, but it seems you didn't actually take it to heart, seeing as how there are still so many mistakes with your language skills here.
I don't want to discourage you and give you a negative vote... but for now, I ought to. Sorry.
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