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Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by YummyToast » 30 Apr 2017, 23:13

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Marine Name (so we know who you are, if you play alien mostly, state that here): Elizabeth Reed

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): Kjuhte Lak'Tuur

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Yessum

Character background (A very BRIEF description of your predators background):'
Kjuhte Lak'Turr, Void Hunter. A name granted to the Yautja proudly known for his unique hunting style revolving around the idea of remaining completely unnoticed, no prey even realizing he is present until they too are nothing but a trophy for him to parade. But it was not always this way, he began life as any other. A young Yautja without any amount of place, renown, or honor. He excelled among his peers however, though not particularly excelling as well in direct engagements he showed great promise in his swiftness and ability to engage and disengage at will from his targets, slowly earning him the respect of his Elder. But Kjuhte was typically thought to not be one with any self pride, a false assumption based upon the fact he did not take to celebrate his kills for very long or often, more so claiming his trophy and moving onto the next without hesitation. This led to some Yautja thinking he was only bloodthirsty and without a sense of honor in the hunt, but this couldn't be further from the truth.

One such occasion often used as a topic of gossip by Kjuhte's naysayers was his first hunt of the serpents, him having managed to claim three during this operation of sorts. Kjuhte's tactics were brutal and swift, he devised a plan to lure his serpent in mind into a small ancient structure located in the forest that his hunt was taking place. The plan was to distract the creatures by an improvised noise-maker of sorts, created by Kjuhte in a few hours time with a collection of rocks and ropes paired with a small nest of some of the native insects known as l'ulij-bpe Di'farik (Screaming Hornets) named appropriately for the 'screaming' sound they make when threatened though they are relatively harmless. Once his trap was set off, hopefully distracting his prey for just a matter of moments, he would lunge forward and swiftly kill and claim his trophy. He located the serpents and within half a night's time lured it to the location where it would be drawn into his trap.

His plan worked flawlessly, once the creatures entered the large circular room he watched from above through a small opening waiting for the perfect moment to spring it... Now! He pulled a rope, sending a tied rock smashing into the nest of the Screaming Hornets as they began to cry out wildly. The serpents hissed, their heads turning wildly as they they searched for the source of the loud sound. The young Yautja sprung upon this opportunity, leaping down into the center of the two serpents and swiftly swinging his wristblades around him, immediately killing one and slicing the other's leg leaving it completely immobile and ready to be finished off. Kjuhte took a few moments to strip his trophies, tying their heads to a piece of wire around his waist and slinging their tails over his shoulder. But he wasn't done hunting yet...

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator. This will weigh HEAVILY and frequently breaking from this MAY result in removal)?
My Yautja is known for trying to remain unnoticeable, taking pride in his prey having no idea he is coming, a true ghost among the hunting grounds. He enjoys making sometimes overly elaborate traps to toy and confuse his prey, but hardly ever directly confronting them. If his prey realize he is present it's time to lay low, or devise an even better trap to further confuse his victims. Sometimes however, he enjoys inciting more confusion. Should his prey take note of his presence he'll try to create a unique trap or diversion to lead them off his trail. He enjoys slow rewarding kills that have meaning over the number of kills. Making his victims suffer their own unique experience each time. That also being said he enjoys to prey upon the strong, using weaker creatures only as a way to manipulate the actions of those who may be swayed. A weaker more helpless marine seems to be lost? Terrify him into thinking his death is near so that he can bring his stronger ally in closer, fear reveals who the strong and weak are. Meanwhile serpents are slightly more difficult to manipulate in the ways of fear, so perhaps to lure them is the best option. A ravager may be more likely to run recklessly into a trap if a Hunter lies dying on the floor and needs rescue. All can be manipulated and this Yautja knows it.

Why should we whitelist you?
I believe i should be whitelisted mainly because I believe myself to be a talented roleplayer and someone who can create very enjoyable experiences for others and myself. One of my favorite things in a game of Colonial Marines is at round end whenever another player says "Oh man, who was 'X' that thing you did was awesome! I had so much fun man!" and therefore I make it my goal to create unique experiences that warrant a reaction like that. I believe that the Predator whitelist is less about being a powerhouse so that you can kill other players, but rather that it is meant to be a unique role that gives a player the tools to make a round more enjoyable for everyone should they use it responsibly. In addition I have had the Predator whitelist in the past whenever it was originally opened to donors but was removed from the whitelist whenever there was a large reform due to massive changes to the system. But that's to say that EVERYONE was removed from the whitelist at that time so it wasn't a punishment.
Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
Nope
Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
Nope
Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor?
Yes I understand completely.
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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by doodeeda » 02 May 2017, 20:44

Sounds good, but I'm not really sure how you'd balance the whole unseen thing but also making an impact on people's rounds. There's not much in the way of trapmaking for predators too..you might be restrained gameplay wise unless a coder helps out. Unless you have some ideas you'd like to share?
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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by YummyToast » 02 May 2017, 21:35

I'd be really glad to go into detail in some PM's about some ideas I've had/executed when I first had the pred whitelist. Each idea for me sorta feels like its own story and I'd hate to spoil it for anyone if you get me. :)

EDIT: Sorta missed the part about 'making an impact without being seen' to which I have a response here- Whenever I say ghost among the hunting grounds I don't particularly mean he is completely unseen or never interacted with. Kjuhte simply seeks to be a mystery among his prey. I notice a lot of Predator rounds where, after awhile of engagement with a pred, the marines will have a really good summary of the Predator: It has cloaking, it uses ancient melee weaponry, has a long range energy canon, it bleeds and therefore can die, etc... Kjuhte prefers to never let this knowledge be known in the first place. Choosing only to engage targets with careful planning so that he can guarantee an elimination and claim of a trophy all the while ensuring that anyone that begins to have a grasp on just what it is hunting them down carries that knowledge to the grave. People may hear whispers of him, fear him, but all of that stems from the unknown void surrounding him. He won't give marines a chance to understand what they're dealing with, and that makes him all the more terrifying.

TLDR: Yes he may lure a lone marine into a building where he'll sneak up behind them, uncloak, and engage them in a short standoff. But in the end all that the other marines will find is a shredded corpse and no traces of what caused it. Kjuhte takes pride in knowing that each engagement with his victims/prey is (hopefully) their first true experience with him and it will surely be their last. He forms a sort of bond with his prey at this time, something I'd love to elaborate more on IC and in game.
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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by MrMafioso » 03 May 2017, 14:58

People like you are why I don't have the confidence that I'd pass to even bother making my own freaky deaky application - I mean I'm a great roleplayer but my creative writing is actually rubbish so +1 I suppose?
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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by YummyToast » 03 May 2017, 22:33

MrMafioso wrote:People like you are why I don't have the confidence that I'd pass to even bother making my own freaky deaky application - I mean I'm a great roleplayer but my creative writing is actually rubbish so +1 I suppose?
I encourage you to at least give it a go! Looking at what others make and just practicing can be an easy way to get there, heck you might already be there you just don't know it yet.
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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by Cash7800 » 05 May 2017, 17:30

+1 I would love to be the marine that fights you.

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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by MrMafioso » 09 May 2017, 14:26

YummyToast wrote:I encourage you to at least give it a go! Looking at what others make and just practicing can be an easy way to get there, heck you might already be there you just don't know it yet.
Its the brief story bit what shall give me the biggest of issues, mainly because I am not great with words or well creative writing, and that's why I shall likely give it another few months or maybe not before I try. However thanks for the encouragement!
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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by Feweh » 09 May 2017, 15:37

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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by Casany » 09 May 2017, 15:38

MrMafioso wrote:Its the brief story bit what shall give me the biggest of issues, mainly because I am not great with words or well creative writing, and that's why I shall likely give it another few months or maybe not before I try. However thanks for the encouragement!
Take it from the guy who's been denied 5 times here. The first app is never perfect, you just gotta take the critique, fix the story and make another. It takes time but it'll be worth the struggle if you want it enough

Also, gonna remain neutral
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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by MrMafioso » 09 May 2017, 16:46

Casany wrote:Take it from the guy who's been denied 5 times here. The first app is never perfect, you just gotta take the critique, fix the story and make another. It takes time but it'll be worth the struggle if you want it enough

Also, gonna remain neutral
Yeah, I feel the first one not being great, and I'll probably start writing one out, expect it to get denied and then just continue to make it better overtime.
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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by Boltersam » 12 May 2017, 12:34

The backstory doesn't really tell us anything about your Predator. He's stealthy and he uses traps. This could've, and probably should've, been in playstyle instead of the backstory about showcasing what your Predator's actually like.

Your actual playstyle is better. You want to be sneaky and try to make people call for help from stronger people. That's solid enough, but it doesn't always work. And y'know, calling for help ends up in swarms. It's flawed, because in execution it'll usually be detrimental.

The "Why you should whitelist me" is nice. Nice, but being a Predator when every other donor was, doesn't really mean anything. Not to discredit it, I'm just of the opinion that it's more useful if it's earned through the stricter modern whitelist. Honestly, I can't say to have noticed your character beyond a brief glimmer of recognition at the name, but that's likely just me.

I don't believe this app meets the standards, but it hits some spots right.

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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by YummyToast » 15 May 2017, 14:19

Boltersam wrote:The backstory doesn't really tell us anything about your Predator. He's stealthy and he uses traps. This could've, and probably should've, been in playstyle instead of the backstory about showcasing what your Predator's actually like.

Your actual playstyle is better. You want to be sneaky and try to make people call for help from stronger people. That's solid enough, but it doesn't always work. And y'know, calling for help ends up in swarms. It's flawed, because in execution it'll usually be detrimental.

The "Why you should whitelist me" is nice. Nice, but being a Predator when every other donor was, doesn't really mean anything. Not to discredit it, I'm just of the opinion that it's more useful if it's earned through the stricter modern whitelist. Honestly, I can't say to have noticed your character beyond a brief glimmer of recognition at the name, but that's likely just me.

I don't believe this app meets the standards, but it hits some spots right.

-1.
When it comes to the playstyle, my Predator doesn't RELY on making people call for help and then trying to engage the backup that shows up. It's simply, should he be having trouble finding powerful prey, a way for him to locate the more competent marines, find which one is worthy game, and wait for them to disperse and for an opportunity to arise. In reality that's only a small portion of what he'll be doing. As for me referencing that I have been a Predator before and had the whitelist. It wasn't to say "Oh I got it once I should get it again." regardless of the "Difficulty" of the apps. But rather to show that in the time I did have the whitelist and was active on it before the reforms I didn't cause any problems with it and to my knowledge I managed to create some very unique enjoyable experiences for both myself and the people who got to play with me as a Predator. It was just moreso to show that I'm familiar with it and won't cause issues. Finally, I've been playing under a male character recently named Nathan Danse. Anything else though I appreciate the constructive criticism and should there be a next time for applying I'll be sure to keep it in mind. Thanks my friend!
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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by jusa297 » 21 May 2017, 14:54

Ok, this one seems pretty good. The history seems good, but i don't feel like that's the most important part. What really gets to me is that you have a unique and distinguishable playstile of traping and confusing, but never confronting them. I expect to see you trapping me, so that i know it's you. Best hopes.

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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by Sarah_U. » 23 May 2017, 22:13

Your take-out of the three xenos is rather over the top. I like the idea of distracting them, but predators even cloaked gets spotted by xenos at the slightest mistake. Furthermore, young blood are generally thrown into the hunt being told things like "It'll be hard, but that's what we're paying you for." (Joke aside)

I guess it was alright, but I can't know if I like or just feel meh about it. I feel like I can give you a chance, but your activity doesn't meet my personal requirements. I'm super tired and my judgement may be affect though. Overall I'll stick to neutral, but I wouldn't mind moving to a +1 once my mind is less tired and I can see some more potential in ya'.
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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by YummyToast » 24 May 2017, 04:28

Sarah_U. wrote:Your take-out of the three xenos is rather over the top. I like the idea of distracting them, but predators even cloaked gets spotted by xenos at the slightest mistake. Furthermore, young blood are generally thrown into the hunt being told things like "It'll be hard, but that's what we're paying you for." (Joke aside)

I guess it was alright, but I can't know if I like or just feel meh about it. I feel like I can give you a chance, but your activity doesn't meet my personal requirements. I'm super tired and my judgement may be affect though. Overall I'll stick to neutral, but I wouldn't mind moving to a +1 once my mind is less tired and I can see some more potential in ya'.
Thanks a ton, I've been a really busy the past two days and have only had the opportunity to get on the server during late hours. I'll be trying to stick more time to it though :)

Edit: Also it was only two xenos. Yes it does mention first that he killed three total but that's what the "He wasn't done hunting" aludes to. The specific part involving him slaying xenos in his trap only references him fighting two at that time. But you did say you were sleepy xD. I also assumed that it was easier for him to take the two of them out so easily was because they were distracted. :)
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Re: Kjuhte Lak'Tuur [Void Hunter]

Post by Feweh » 25 May 2017, 12:35

Denied, not enough feedback and havent seen you at all much in-game.

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