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Post by FearTheBlackout » 16 Jun 2018, 11:17

Byond ID: Devildabeast

Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here):
  • Bailey “Androgyne” James
  • Damon “Hellboy” Banner
  • Dana “Croc” Swartwout
  • Amelia “Green” Goodwin
  • Meztli “Penumbra” Tlachi
  • Tonati “Lumen” Tlachi
  • Dominick “Umpire” Feldspar
Names in red are my most often played characters.

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor? Yes! I’ve read over it many times and observed it in-game, and I think I have a good understanding of how it works.

Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):
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How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)? Samaju Ua will exploit one of the Predator’s greatest tools: Stealth. She will utilize not just camouflage, but the destruction of lights and flares to disorient her prey and create a disturbing ambience for whichever player she is hunting. She’ll rarely go after multiple prey, instead choosing to cull those who have been isolated from their groups.

U’a is primarily concerned, first and foremost, with herself -- no one else. She is obsessed with preserving her trophies and her image, and will do everything in her power to avoid being captured or overpowered. She has no interest in “helping” one side over the other, only culling the most ferocious prey, whichever side they may be on.

U’a has nothing but disdain for the Serpents, them being her only competition in instilling fear in their prey before the kill. She finds them rather mindless and too abundant to hunt haphazardly, going after only the strongest Serpents that have proven themselves in the field of battle.

Why should we whitelist you? First and foremost: I love roleplay! I came from Baystation 12 so I’m more comfortable in a position that requires a lot of roleplay and creative thinking. I think Predators are a unique faction that I would do well in, have a lot of fun doing, and make fun for others.

One thing I'll acknowledge out of the gate is that my forum posts aren't exceptionally high; I know this is a large contributing factor to people receiving their whitelist, and I did wait to apply rather than trying out as soon as I was eligible so I could rack up more posts and game activity. I'm willing to work twice as hard to be active on both the forums and game for the duration my application is open and hope that my efforts have made me recognizable enough to deserve the whitelist.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)? I have not.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why? Not as of right now.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor? Absolutely. I’ve applied for many whitelists in the past and I’m always careful to tread lightly, as I know that whitelists are a privilege, not a right.
Meztli 'Penumbra' Tlachi - reasonable, outgoing CMP WARRANT REVOKED; INVESTIGATION PENDING
Tonati 'Lumen' Tlachi - focused, sarcastic Doctor/Researcher
Bailey 'Androgyne' James - exactly what you'd expect
Dominick 'Umpire' Feldspar - creepy, slow-paced Officer
Dana 'Croc' Swartwout - dawdling, unsympathetic Squad Marine/Specialist
Damon 'Hellboy' Banner - satanic, pyromaniacal Squad Marine/Specialist
Amelia 'Green' Goodwin - senile, polite Corporate Liaison/Medical Researcher

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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by Drownie » 16 Jun 2018, 19:02

I'll put some criticism to start.
The story doesn't show much more than what we usually see in the whitelists, a Predator which stalks something for three/four minutes and then kill it -- but I understand that most of 'em are doing it because of fear of getting denied for doing something new.

The Predator is stalker by choice, and not by the situation -- that only helps to add a feeling of monotony and cliche. Also, if you put the story in practice, its basically a Predator cloaked that followed two baldies and when one of 'em noticed her presence - she just hit him in the head with a clan sword, and when the other Marine started running (he didn't even fire) she chases him and starts to plasma caster Xenos in the way that didn't even know what was happening, that's basically everything we don't want a Predator doing.

In the way of acting, that basically refutes the entire story. While cloaked she did seek a random group of marines that didn't even know her existence, and then killed them WITHOUT ANY WARNING or RP, remembering that those Marines are considered Worthy Prey by the Code of Honor. I haven't found anything that confirms she killed the Marine while uncloaked, so if she has done it while cloaked she just broke the Honor Code, that's totally dishonorable.

Taking it in an optimistic way.
The story did assimilate perfectly the Story with the Modus Operandi, giving a good balance for the application. By the way, the story is just great in detail and told enough information to know who this Predator truly is, and is GREAT that this name isn't hard to remember.

If the story had more RP than just this prototype of murderbone it would be twice as nice (even a small talk between the Marine and Pred would be great).

I'll stay neutral until you answer me some of those things I've put here like, did ya kill him cloaked?
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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by FearTheBlackout » 16 Jun 2018, 19:45

Drownie wrote:
16 Jun 2018, 19:02
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Thank you for your response!

To break down your concerns:
The story doesn't show much more than what we usually see in the whitelists, a Predator which stalks something for three/four minutes and then kill it -- but I understand that most of 'em are doing it because of fear of getting denied for doing something new.
I totally understand where you're coming from, although what I was aiming for was a balance of the "meta" -- so to speak -- along with a spin on its execution. Ua is essentially a cat with her mouse; she prefers to toy with her prey as much as possible before finishing the act. It's nothing new to stalk your prey and kill it, no, but I intend to do it in a more roundabout way: Remove flares and lights from the prey's viscinity, push them down before vanishing, maybe even aim a plasma weapon on them cloaked (with the safety on, of course) to make them think they're about to be shot -- before finally swooping in for the kill. This would apply more to Marines than Xenos, of course, but I'm sure I can find other ways to screw with their heads that doesn't involve spamming *laugh and *roar. Predators have to be clever!
The Predator is stalker by choice, and not by the situation -- that only helps to add a feeling of monotony and cliche.
Ua finds an intense joy out of picking her prey out of a crowd; she doesn't generally attack groups, instead preferring to punish those who stray from the group and refute safety in numbers, either because of brashness or out of simple mistake. Regardless, isolating is indeed the worst thing you can do in any round, especially a Predator one, and my character would intend to take full advantage of that.
Also, if you put the story in practice, its basically a Predator cloaked that followed two baldies and when one of 'em noticed her presence - she just hit him in the head with a clan sword, and when the other Marine started running (he didn't even fire) she chases him and starts to plasma caster Xenos in the way that didn't even know what was happening, that's basically everything we don't want a Predator doing.
Both of the Survivors were carrying weapons, which marks them as Worthy Prey. Killing her prey quickly isn't something she would do all of the time; she simply opted for a quick kill in this particular instance because the Survivors weren't strong enough of a threat to particularly be worth being toyed with; Ua enjoys bringing the apex of species down a notch to see if they're still willing to put up a fight. These Survivors clearly weren't -- though they were still able-bodied and thus not dishonorable prey -- so she only gave them as much effort as they were willing to give toward their meager situation. She still did toy a little with her first kill, crunching snow in her palm and using her dilapidated translator to project the last words they would ever hear. I didn't see the full movie, but I can think of a scene or two in Predator where the Jungle Warrior would do something similar!
In the way of acting, that basically refutes the entire story. While cloaked she did seek a random group of marines that didn't even know her existence, and then killed them WITHOUT ANY WARNING or RP, remembering that those Marines are considered Worthy Prey by the Code of Honor. I haven't found anything that confirms she killed the Marine while uncloaked, so if she has done it while cloaked she just broke the Honor Code, that's totally dishonorable.
I apologize for leaving out such a crucial detail! Every time I went through the story in my head, I just knew implicitly that she uncloaked before dealing the killing blow so that her mask would be the last thing they see, but that's obviously something I left out of the story. For sure, I would NEVER kill Worthy Prey while cloaked, and would let them see me well before I went in for the attack. So to answer your final question: No, she didn't kill anyone uncloaked, but I understand why the story would imply that.
If the story had more RP than just this prototype of murderbone it would be twice as nice (even a small talk between the Marine and Pred would be great)
Honestly, I think of Ua as someone who has little to no respect for other species, and thinks herself well above them. A conversation with a Marine or especially a Xeno would be like talking to a deer for her -- a total waste of time. However, as stated earlier, there are those few examples that are the apex among their species, which garner much more respect from her than just the average prey. A well-aged Crusher who has slaughtered dozen of Marines, or a Specialist who almost singlehandedly takes down a Queen are much more interesting of a hunt to her, and the prey she's going to prefer to go after first, using the fear tactics I described in the OP. She still wouldn't have too much to say to them, but projecting a message in English or two so that her prey knows what they're up against would definitely be right up her alley.

Thank you for all your criticisms. When and if I get accepted, these are the things that are important to think about! I'm glad my story was sufficiently detailed enough to describe who she was, which is exactly what I was going for.
Meztli 'Penumbra' Tlachi - reasonable, outgoing CMP WARRANT REVOKED; INVESTIGATION PENDING
Tonati 'Lumen' Tlachi - focused, sarcastic Doctor/Researcher
Bailey 'Androgyne' James - exactly what you'd expect
Dominick 'Umpire' Feldspar - creepy, slow-paced Officer
Dana 'Croc' Swartwout - dawdling, unsympathetic Squad Marine/Specialist
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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by Drownie » 16 Jun 2018, 19:54

Answered my messages well and did explain some questions I had about some things that was superficial or bad explained in the story, understanding Ua better now has helped me to "decode" her actions.
Also, I've seen Dana a lot of times and its such a great player. +1
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Post by FearTheBlackout » 16 Jun 2018, 19:57

Appreciated! I'm surprised you recognize Dana the most out of all of them. The only thing I thought she was known for was having orange hair and calling people the C word. :lol:
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Tonati 'Lumen' Tlachi - focused, sarcastic Doctor/Researcher
Bailey 'Androgyne' James - exactly what you'd expect
Dominick 'Umpire' Feldspar - creepy, slow-paced Officer
Dana 'Croc' Swartwout - dawdling, unsympathetic Squad Marine/Specialist
Damon 'Hellboy' Banner - satanic, pyromaniacal Squad Marine/Specialist
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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by FearTheBlackout » 19 Jun 2018, 18:09

I foresee this application being denied due to my recent actions, but if anyone could provide any additional feedback on what I could work on for both my backstory and the way I play in-game for the next time I apply, it would be appreciated.
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Dana 'Croc' Swartwout - dawdling, unsympathetic Squad Marine/Specialist
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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by Sneakyr » 22 Jun 2018, 00:50

I don't have any idea what you mean by recent actions, so whatever.

I liked the story. Stories are more for showing of imagination and RP chops with knowledge of lore of a secondary, in my opinion, and they have little to do with in-game predator rules such as the honor code or what have you unless there's some sort of gross misunderstanding made clear by them, something that your story did not have.

I would have been intrigued to see your behavior as a predator, but it seems you have resigned yourself to denial due to whatever incident you mentioned. Good luck next time.
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Post by FearTheBlackout » 22 Jun 2018, 09:29

Thank you for the insight! I might be overreacting, but I'm definitely not saying "close this". I'm still happy to take feedback up until Jamie reaches a decision.
Meztli 'Penumbra' Tlachi - reasonable, outgoing CMP WARRANT REVOKED; INVESTIGATION PENDING
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Bailey 'Androgyne' James - exactly what you'd expect
Dominick 'Umpire' Feldspar - creepy, slow-paced Officer
Dana 'Croc' Swartwout - dawdling, unsympathetic Squad Marine/Specialist
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Post by Kavlo » 26 Jun 2018, 01:38

Okay well I'm fairly happy with this application. The story is good and does a nice job at showing off how your predator will act. You're clear with your intent on how you'll them in that section too. You gave a fair amount of reasoning on why to be whitelisted as well. To top that all off the responses you gave so far in this thread are clear and agreeable. Last point is I'm not gonna look into what actions you did elsewhere this is just me judging your application, Jamie can decide if this gets decided off of your actions elsewhere.

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Post by FearTheBlackout » 26 Jun 2018, 09:17

I appreciate that a lot!
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Dominick 'Umpire' Feldspar - creepy, slow-paced Officer
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Post by Imperator_Titan » 08 Jul 2018, 17:31

Good backstory, good playstyle. I don't know you ICly but that'd be because I am currently on vacation.

Now, I don't know about any recent event but the first sign of a good player is one that takes responsibility for their actions. Sure, if a head has an issue with it, they have an issue with it. But I don't.

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Post by FearTheBlackout » 08 Jul 2018, 17:50

Thank you very much! Now, I have been inactive recently, but that's only because I've been preoccupied dealing with a family death and finishing school and stuff. I intend to keep playing and posting very soon, so all posts on this app are still appreciated.
Meztli 'Penumbra' Tlachi - reasonable, outgoing CMP WARRANT REVOKED; INVESTIGATION PENDING
Tonati 'Lumen' Tlachi - focused, sarcastic Doctor/Researcher
Bailey 'Androgyne' James - exactly what you'd expect
Dominick 'Umpire' Feldspar - creepy, slow-paced Officer
Dana 'Croc' Swartwout - dawdling, unsympathetic Squad Marine/Specialist
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Post by coroneljones » 09 Jul 2018, 08:43

A good backstory and from what I heard, pretty good Roleplayer with an interesting playstyle, especially its description.
That and the points brought above lead to a
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Post by Aceluke123 » 12 Jul 2018, 20:17

I really do love your application, but with your 'recent activity' that happened, I will have to deny this application.

Apologies but this gets a -1.

Deal with the situation and apply again. I really loved reading this one as your story and playstyle is one to like.
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Post by FearTheBlackout » 12 Jul 2018, 20:25

That's completely fair and I do understand. I'm only looking for critique at this point, so I do appreciate what you have to say.
Meztli 'Penumbra' Tlachi - reasonable, outgoing CMP WARRANT REVOKED; INVESTIGATION PENDING
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Bailey 'Androgyne' James - exactly what you'd expect
Dominick 'Umpire' Feldspar - creepy, slow-paced Officer
Dana 'Croc' Swartwout - dawdling, unsympathetic Squad Marine/Specialist
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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by Imperator_Titan » 13 Jul 2018, 05:04

Edit: After reviewing the recent note myself which I won't disclose here for obvious reasons. I'd say maybe you should wait it out for a month or two on second thought. That's a pretty major thing to have done. I'd +1 your application if I had the chance to do so again however I can't +1 you knowing that you did an extremely bad thing. Perhaps the next time around I'd do so. You did disclose it here however, which is why I'm going to stick to neutral. If you can sway me, feel free to do so.

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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by Karmac » 13 Jul 2018, 09:05

ok could somebody fucking tell me what this 'recent note' is so everyone else knows what to think

christ your like a bunch of school kids with your secrets
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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by Drownie » 13 Jul 2018, 10:53

Karmac wrote:
13 Jul 2018, 09:05
ok could somebody fucking tell me what this 'recent note' is so everyone else knows what to think

christ your like a bunch of school kids with your secrets
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Post by Karmac » 13 Jul 2018, 19:24

I'm sorry I don't look at ban appeals like ever

not everyone cares about how funny some of them can be

also -1
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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by FearTheBlackout » 14 Jul 2018, 00:05

Imperator_Titan wrote:
13 Jul 2018, 05:04
Edit: After reviewing the recent note myself which I won't disclose here for obvious reasons. I'd say maybe you should wait it out for a month or two on second thought. That's a pretty major thing to have done. I'd +1 your application if I had the chance to do so again however I can't +1 you knowing that you did an extremely bad thing. Perhaps the next time around I'd do so. You did disclose it here however, which is why I'm going to stick to neutral. If you can sway me, feel free to do so.

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I totally respect that you have principles as a member of staff. I could have been less vague in describing my actions, but I'm glad it made some kind of impact. Trust is something that takes far longer to build back up than it takes to break down, so I'm not going to try and make some long-winded speech about why I should be forgiven and be allowed to be whitelisted. I'm just happy that people are satisfied with the application itself; it gives me confidence that I can make it work the second run around.

Karmac, thank you for voting, but how do you feel about the application itself? I would love to hear.
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Dominick 'Umpire' Feldspar - creepy, slow-paced Officer
Dana 'Croc' Swartwout - dawdling, unsympathetic Squad Marine/Specialist
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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by Karmac » 14 Jul 2018, 03:51

The application overall is good, but comes across as pointlessly well-detailed, your intended playstyle didn't need to be three seperate paragraphs but does a good job of making it sound more interesting than it really is. The backstory suffers from this as well, every little thing is detailed in full, but you describe situations and the reactions of your predator perfectly so it balances out. I am dissapointed you fell into the trap of describing the place your predator is in before introducing your character, I could care less about this shithole of a planet, I'd prefer to be hit with information pertaining to the predator I'm supposed to be learning about. So the application itself gets a +1, that's my opinion, for those willing to look past your behaviour.
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Post by FearTheBlackout » 14 Jul 2018, 16:58

Much appreciated. Knowing what to work on helps a lot.

Honestly, my hiatus on CM has been extended a great deal simply because I don't feel like playing anymore as much as I used to. I don't really feel like I belong here and I don't think I can currently commit to the activity required for Predator -- and that's even assuming I somehow got approved the first run around. Even though I'm predicting a 99% chance of denial, you can still consider this application retracted on my end. Thank you to everyone who posted with feedback.
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Dominick 'Umpire' Feldspar - creepy, slow-paced Officer
Dana 'Croc' Swartwout - dawdling, unsympathetic Squad Marine/Specialist
Damon 'Hellboy' Banner - satanic, pyromaniacal Squad Marine/Specialist
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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by Imperator_Titan » 14 Jul 2018, 17:07

Good luck the next time around brother. You really don't seem that bad a person and are responding to criticism quite well. I do hope you end up making another application down the line.

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Post by Emeraldblood » 29 Aug 2018, 14:24

Do you wish to withdraw this or wait for council votes on your appeal?
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Re: Devildabeast - Samaju Ua (Fear Feaster)

Post by Emeraldblood » 15 Sep 2018, 01:46

Give I never got a response back, just gonna this as an official request to withdraw the app.

Resolved - Withdrawn; You can reapply as of Oct 14th, 2018.
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