Schall Meisters Predator Application: Ruvik Sei'zarr (Born Legacy)

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Schall Meisters Predator Application: Ruvik Sei'zarr (Born Legacy)

Post by Schall Meister » 16 Jul 2018, 04:44

Byond ID:
0th Deadly Sin
Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here):
Rick Shanks
Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name):
Ruvik Sei'zarr
Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor?
yes
Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):






Sei'zarr, sei'zarr was always looked down upon by his elder brethren, he hoped someday that he could grow up to be just like them and the rest of his clan and to be accepted as one of the blooded, though little did he know that every living thing in this universe that has a dream, only those who are truly determined are destined to meeting achieving their desires, so he trained, and trained nonstop, and in time he would only grow stronger and stronger, the elites saw that his potential was unlike any other and that it was far different than the others, he would be considered a prodigy, a prodigy who would rise up and become one of them some day a lot sooner than expected, he is completely finessed the arts of using dual weapons, wrist blades are his favorite, and he is exceptional with using his bio mask, ranged weaponry and cloaking gear, they knew all along what he was capable of what he could do, but they hid this from me because they knew that if they were to let him know then his excitement would only weaken him and distract him from future events to come, so they tortured him, they despised him and they looked down upon him like cruel brothers and sisters treating him like he simply lacked the responsibility, not to make him feel discouraged but to empower him and make him work harder, this lead him to feel like an outcast to his clan, so he trained harder, he wanted to prove them all that they were wrong about him that he too, one of the lowest of the low can still rise to the top, maybe one day his clan will realize what he was all along capable of, it became his pride and life long goal aside from becoming a warrior, he didn't want to just become a warrior, he wanted to become THE warrior, the best warrior, the warrior above all warriors, as he possessed a great fighting spirit, he was a natural born fighter with the soul purpose of someday becoming one of the legendary hunters his clan has ever known.

Ever since the day he killed his first Prey Ruvik was always the first to bring back his prey ahead of all his own fellow Yautja brothers, during his days as a trainee he dreamed and he yearned for the day where he'd finally get to explore the wild and kill all sorts of worthy prey bringing it back to his elders and earning himself a place amongst the elites of his clan, as a arrogant and stubborn and rather always violent Yautja, there's nothing he loves more than the way of his race, and a good fight, it is what motivates him to finding worthy prey, he is sure that he thinks the same way as the other Yautja due to their code of honor but his perspective of the universe is entirely different from the others, he thinks that in the universe where we all live in, there's two kinds of beings out there, one being him and the other being what he can kill, while he sympathizes for the prey he kills by respecting their ability to fight honorably he always takes their head as his trophy for defeating them, the elders have kept a close eye on how much he'd been improving since his days of training and they were widely impressed, he is without doubt following his dreams of becoming the "greatest" hunter, because the "greatest hunter" has to be that hunter the can defeat all forms of prey weakest to strongest, he wants to some day defeat the grand prey of all prey one on one in combat, even at the cost of his own life he sees it as his destiny that is worth dying for.

Long ago when the latter was younger, Ruvik was told the story by the elder whom raised him of a legendary Yautja that hunted and killed screechers all across planets but later lost his life after being mortally wounded by one, this Yautja was rumored to have lived thousands of years ago, Ruviks appearance widely resembled what was remembered of that particular Yautja, and it amazed Ruvik after hearing that story, the story that inspired him to look up to his brethren and some day become one of them, because he wanted to accomplish the exact same goal the legendary Yautja did, so he trained ever since he was younger in pursuit of his dreams, because he knew that the only way for him to be the "GREATEST" warrior/hunter, was for him to be able to stand toe to toe with the strongest of his kinds rivalry, he hopes to some day slay one and take her head as trophy, and he knows that in order to do this he must also prepare to be slain himself, as he accepts the fact the one day, he will be slain and when they day finally comes he will die an honorable death just like the Yautja the came and left before him.

Ruvik was dispatched once dispatched on an ice planet filled with nothing but a desert of snow and ruins, he was in search for a hive on the task of destroying them all and taking their mothers head as his first trophy, when he embarked on this journey he came fully prepared with everything, he carried a tribal lance, a full set of his hardest armor, the sharpest pair of his wrist blades, everything he knew he would need because he knew what he was up against and he knew what it would take, for a young but strong Yautja like himself to annihilate and purge this planet of its screecher infestation, the planets inhabitants greeted him, but greeted him with hostility, a took numbers, large numbers, hundreds tried to take him on, he sustained major injuries but fought like the warrior he always dreamed of becoming, and the warrior he grew up admiring when he was younger, and just like a warrior he became to be, he slew and spilled every last one of their blood leaving them to rott in the snow, none of them were a match for him, but they fought and died honorably as they and he gave it their all, the young Yautja celebrated his early victory, but this victory became unfortunate when the Yautja wasn't aware that the foe he had came for was already amongst him, he fought bravely, valiently, but unfortunate for him the battle ended in his own blood, she was too powerful, he was too weak, he wasnt strong enough, not yet, his destiny, his story had yet to reach its end, it was undoubtedly his end, and he was ready for it, but she didn't deliver the finishing blow, instead she left him to freeze to death in the snow, it was revealed that the reason for her retreat was the arrival of his brethren who saved him from a cold death, as he told them his encounter with the screecher, he vowed that not today, not tomorrow, but he will slaughter every screecher he is to come across, and he the last will resume their battle.




How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)?
I will be the determined queen hunter, she will be my first target once she steps out the hive only on rounds where the preds are entirely at war with the xenos will i follow my preds background, when this occurs ill only attack the queen 1 or 2 times the round and only when shes off the ovi and outside the hive and with her underlings, Ruvik enjoys fighting that means he enjoys a challenge and hes also prepared to die as stated in the last paragraph, so ill attack her the first time and go for the kill if i fail the first time then the second time ill attack her and wont stop attacking until either i or she is killed then ill take her corpse, Ruviks favorite weapon is the wrist blade thats how ill kill her, ill take her and her hive on all at once i target the queen because i want to give the xenomorphs a little trouble, especially if they are winning easily against the marines, that doesnt mean ill help the marines ill give them trouble too, but the queen is the xenomorphs trump card, she stands out because without her then they will pretty much lose which is not what i want to accomplish, ill kill their first queen and leave the new one be because she'll have to rego through the process of evolving and becoming stronger and less easier to kill again, in other words i'll try to make the rounds longer and funner, other than that ill just do what the other predators are doing, that includes chilling in their hq, brawling each other, cloaking around, etc.
Why should we whitelist you?
after given some thought on how i can answer this question i can only say that i will not abuse my role as predator
and most definitely not break any of the rules as predator, i just want to play as them and join others
and i find the Yautja super interesting, after observing and observing all the rounds with people playing as them
i will stay true to the code of honor and ill try to make the round fun for others playing the opposite roles
cause all i want to do is have fun trying something new and with that being said i hope you no i have
no intentions on violating the rules or ruining the game for anyone else
i find that possible since i two have had players ruin the game for me both when i play marine and alien
my overall response to you question about why you should whitelist me is because i will follow the rules, i will not abuse or do anything to get it taken away from me
and that i would like to experience this game on a new level.
i want to be a predator because they have more complex roles, its pretty much more rp and i love rping, and what stands out the most about them to me is how
strong and threatening they can be!

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
no
Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
no

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor?
yes
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Re: Schall Meisters Predator Application: Ruvik Sei'zarr (Born Legacy)

Post by ThePiachu » 16 Jul 2018, 04:57

You know that a Preadator killing a Queen is not unheard of, right? There are even Predators that take out entire hives. Have you read much into the lore?

You didn't describe how you'll play your predator, only how you'll want to kill the queen. What are they like on a normal round? How do they stand out? What's unique about them?

I don't remember seeing you in the game, and you made 3 posts total with your account. The latter especially is rather low. Your account age just barely passes the minimum requirements.

-1 for me, please use the time to improve your application and participate in the community (in-game and on the forums) more.
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Re: Schall Meisters Predator Application: Ruvik Sei'zarr (Born Legacy)

Post by Imperator_Titan » 16 Jul 2018, 07:11

This is the Mary Sue of predator applications unironically. The guy hunts queens for a living and his first trophy was that of a queen, as a Youngblood? Yeah that's not how it goes. Young bloods are the match of a xenomorph warrior lorewise since their equipment is subpar. No way you're gonna wipe out a hive when everything you have can melt. You're going to hunt queens too, in your playstyle? The reason why nobody does that even if they're allowed to is because it 100% messes with the round balance and quickly shifts the round over to one side. Never heard of you either.

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Re: Schall Meisters Predator Application: Ruvik Sei'zarr (Born Legacy)

Post by Kavlo » 18 Jul 2018, 10:01

The other comments already covered the problems with your backstory and lore pretty well, the only thing I can add is you might wanna work on your grammar and structure for your posts.
Your intention on how you play your predator can be summed up to "I will kill queen" with a bit of flavor in it.
This is just a mary sue predator application overall.

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Re: Schall Meisters Predator Application: Ruvik Sei'zarr (Born Legacy)

Post by Ghostdex » 18 Jul 2018, 10:28

Not really much else to touch on aside from a little bit of how your story was written. The sentences are linear and a few at least go on for longer than needed, the view switches from third, to first and then back to third once which is somewhat disorienting.

I think you have a grasp on whats up, but you should read over accepted apps and the lore a bit more, -1.
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Re: Schall Meisters Predator Application: Ruvik Sei'zarr (Born Legacy)

Post by Accinator50 » 11 Aug 2018, 08:13

I don't care if you have a bad grammar or not because I think every player, not only those one who can speak good English, should have a chance to be whitelisted. I also like the idea that you are going to kill some Xenos because I've never saw any Predator which attacked Xenos or even their Queen. The most Predators kill Humans. But you can't say that you just kill the queen and wait for a new queen to be born and then kill her too. That wouldn't be too much fun for the Xenos and Humans because then the Xenos would loose every round and that wouldn't be fun. Your background story is also not so good but it's okey.
I'm sorry but I have to give you a -1. Maybe you read some accepted application and then your next application is going to be better.
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Re: Schall Meisters Predator Application: Ruvik Sei'zarr (Born Legacy)

Post by Karmac » 14 Aug 2018, 09:11

galaxy no

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Re: Schall Meisters Predator Application: Ruvik Sei'zarr (Born Legacy)

Post by TheMaskedMan2 » 25 Aug 2018, 02:27

Most Predators lore-wise wouldn't be able to easily kill a Queen, that's just silly. Not even taking into account the core concept of the story, your grammar in general is just, not very good. I would work on that. My suggestion is to read other accepted applications, learn what they did right. Then read denied applications, learn what they did wrong. Do this and then try again.

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Re: Schall Meisters Predator Application: Ruvik Sei'zarr (Born Legacy)

Post by spartanbobby » 14 Sep 2018, 18:01

I can't say I've seen you in-game and your forum activity isn't that great
and along with all the other points made
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Post by Symbiosis » 29 Sep 2018, 07:18

Haven't heard the term Mary-Sue in a while, but damn, that's fitting. -1.
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Re: Schall Meisters Predator Application: Ruvik Sei'zarr (Born Legacy)

Post by Emeraldblood » 29 Sep 2018, 14:07

Resolved - Denied; work to improve on your app and be more involved with the community over the next few months.
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