MuFussa pred app - Than-guan H'chak

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MuFussa pred app - Than-guan H'chak

Post by MuFussa » 18 Dec 2018, 20:55

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MuFussa.

Marine Name (so we know who you are; if you play alien mostly, state that here):
Maximus George.

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name):
Than-guan H'chak.

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor?
Yes i am. I have also read the updated one many times as well as before posting.

Character background (An ADEQUATE description and story of your predators background):
Than-guan H'chak was ready for his first hunt and it was about to begin. Than-guans pod landed with a slight crash sound crushing a small sparse tree underneath, but aside from a few shudders He was fine, and nothing would stop Him now. He started his walk into the mountainous jungle to find his prey.

After a few hours had passed he had covered a large distance and had found nothing yet, growing weary but taking solace in the fact he was being thorough in his hunt. "A grand hunting ground indeed" He thought to Himself. A few minutes later after spotting a cave in the mountainous landscape he decided to take shelter to rest and eat. Seeing a large herbivore drinking from a small water source he makes short work of it before carving off as much meat as He needs whilst thanking the gods. Putting all of the meat in his pouch he moves to the cave preparing it for the coming night.

About halfway through his meal he hears something, a slight echo, deep in the caves. Quickly finishing His mouthful Than-guan leaves the remaining meat next to the fire leaving to move deeper inside to follow the noise. Contemplating to himself whether this could be the prey he was sent to hunt he quickly scanned his surrounding toggling his sight."This could be it, I hope it is worthy of battle." he said quietly to himself. the natural light of the cave entrance dulled as He walked deeper into the unknown making sure to stay quiet and moving carefully as to not draw attention early.

What Than-guan h'chak found in the cave, no Yautja could have prepared for there was a strange deep red glowing gemstone like material, the light that shone from it danced around the cave seeming to almost highlight around him, giving away his position almost immediately. Although Than-guan had found what he was looking for, A grand and worthy prey indeed. The battle that ensued would be one for Than-Guan to tell tale of the rest of his life.

The creature spewed forth a wave of acid at Than-guan narrowly avoiding the hunter Jumping out of the way and activating a smartdisk he throws it at the serpents feet directing it to loosen up its footing and knock it from its perch knowing he stood no chance to win if the serpent had the high ground. His plan worked to good effect sending the shadow leaping down out of the alcove above. Landing a mere 7 paces from the young hunter, It quickly gathered itself up and scurried towards Than-guan taking a swipe with a scything claw that was quickly blocked by Than-guan's clan sword The beasts attacked furiously and its next swing sent his sword clattering into the distance disarming Than-guan. Deciding he does not yet need to retrieve it he leaves it laying on the ground where it fell. Waiting for an opening in the serpents defense while activating his wrist bracer to use in melee he roared defiantly, ducking below the serpents next attack and following through with a slice to the chest acid bursting from its new wounds causing another roar to erupt from the young hunter.

The creature although injured still attacked without mercy or fear for its life not even slowing down, its frantic flailing manages to rend a deep scratch into the yautjas mask fairly bad and slicing deep into his chest Than-guan keeps fighting through the pain, his masks sight matrix failing every few seconds from the beating it took. Quickly drawing his arm across in a furious slash that sent the xeno reeling he quickly activates his bracer calling the embedded disc back striking a glancing blow the off balanced serpent fell heavily to the ground stunned for a moment. Catching the disc with one hand he quickly pulls out some salve hurriedly smearing it into his wound before dropping the remnants.

The battle raged on for what seems like an eternity with both the serpent and Than-guan striking mighty blows against one another. Awaiting his opportunity to retrieve his fallen sword he sees his opportunity as the beast swings wide Than-guan dodges below the strike and in one swift movement picks up his clan sword readying it the way his elders showed him. The serpent charged at Than-guan as he strode towards it sword at the ready, pouncing at Than-guan the serpent is met with his sword directly to the neck sliding deep into the xeno. Roaring loudly Than-guan rotated the blade sliding it through the hissing meat and taking its head off. Taking a deep breath to study himself and checking that none of his wounds were immediately fatal he said a quick prayer to the gods before removing his mask the long failed piece of metal had served its purpose and he would honor it in the future. Kneeling down he snaps off a finger using the hissing blood to burn his clans mark into his body.

Knowing that he could return to his clan blooded and with pride Than-guan activated his bracers to scan the crystal to his surprise there were no records on it He muttered "Maybe Lar'ja would appreciate a sample of this." While Than-guan is trying to dislodge a loose bit of crystal a crack appears in the stone and a small bit of dust falls on his head, Seeing that Than-guan picks up his ruined and honored mask putting it into his hunting pouch as he knows he might have to run. After a few more tries the sample comes loose and Than-guan runs towards the cave entrance expecting the whole cave to collapse. Instead just a few rocks fall behind him after which silence falls again.

Honored the newly blooded yautja exits the cave and begins the walk back to his pod with a story, a trophy, a mark, and a gift for his brother.


How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator)?
Because of His first hunt being a worthy prey in His eyes Than-guan is a very proud and smug Yautja. Often seen laughing about the idea of fighting "small, weak, and insignificant" prey although if they force his wrath upon them He will leave whatever the prey is there and not honor it by turning it into a trophy.

Than-guan also values his and other hunters masks above all else because he sees it as what saved his life on his first hunt. A burning rage ravages him whenever he sees someone unworthy of a mask wearing one even so much as to destroy the mask over letting them wear it any longer.


Why should we whitelist you?
I don't belive that I over anyone else deserves this. Though I know that I would not abuse the role and I am aware of how much power is given to a whitelisted role and preditor in general, and how much of an impact they can make on the round for better or worse. But I have been playing CM for a while about a year now and although as a marine most of the time I'll play smartgunner or specialist I've played engineer enough to be quite good at it. I'm also not shy of playing xeno or going for the end of round ERT if im lucky. I have observed quite a few preditor rounds to try and get a general feel of the Rp side of the role.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?
No I Have not but I do have a couple of three hours from a while ago on record.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?
Also no. I don't tend to play on the other servers much.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor?
Yes i am and i believe it seems more than fair.

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Re: MuFussa pred app - Than-guan H'chak

Post by Rikman » 19 Dec 2018, 11:13

First of all, I need to say that I have never heard of you on the forums, discord, or the game.
Your backstory has some grammar issues, the overall story arch is okay. We the reader need to see some sort of personality from him during his fight. Your name is dangerously similar to my preds name, if you could, it would be nice if you changed it. viewtopic.php?f=127&t=16613&hilit=Than+guan
Overall, you should add more depth to your character. Since I haven’t seen you anywhere, I’m just gonna stay neutral.
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Re: MuFussa pred app - Than-guan H'chak

Post by MuFussa » 19 Dec 2018, 18:30

Rikman wrote:
19 Dec 2018, 11:13
First of all, I need to say that I have never heard of you on the forums, discord, or the game. Your backstory has some grammar issues, the overall story arch is okay. We the reader need to see some sort of personality from him during his fight. Your name is dangerously similar to my preds name, if you could, it would be nice if you changed it. viewtopic.php?f=127&t=16613&hilit=Than+guan Overall, you should add more depth to your character. Since I haven’t seen you anywhere, I’m just gonna stay neutral.
Thank you for the feedback. Those names are extremely similar but as I believe I only have an hour from the time I post the application to edit it therefore I would be unable to change it at this point. I am also fully aware that my name is not too well known and I was hoping to compensate with a captivating story and playstyle.
When a med Researcher gets a fully geared elder pred dragged in by a synth, he thinks i know the best way to research this and what better way than to test it. puts on full pred armor uses a smart disk it targets him (because he is not a pred) it nearly kills him. he heals up the bleeding and goes for a walk forgetting he is still in full pred armor. and in the seige for medbay gets shot at by a few confused marines

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Re: MuFussa pred app - Than-guan H'chak

Post by Imperator_Titan » 20 Dec 2018, 15:01

Weak story, weak playstyle, unknown player.

-1

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Re: MuFussa pred app - Than-guan H'chak

Post by MuFussa » 20 Dec 2018, 17:13

Imperator_Titan wrote:
20 Dec 2018, 15:01
Weak story, weak playstyle, unknown player.

-1
Thank you for reading over it, do you have any feed back other than this or is it just weak?
When a med Researcher gets a fully geared elder pred dragged in by a synth, he thinks i know the best way to research this and what better way than to test it. puts on full pred armor uses a smart disk it targets him (because he is not a pred) it nearly kills him. he heals up the bleeding and goes for a walk forgetting he is still in full pred armor. and in the seige for medbay gets shot at by a few confused marines

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Re: MuFussa pred app - Than-guan H'chak

Post by Ghostdex » 28 Dec 2018, 18:45

Imperator_Titan wrote:
20 Dec 2018, 15:01
Weak story, weak playstyle, unknown player.

-1
Pretty much this, most of the application feels generic but take that as you will. -1 from me.
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Re: MuFussa pred app - Than-guan H'chak

Post by z a n e b o t » 28 Dec 2018, 18:56

Ghostdex wrote:
28 Dec 2018, 18:45
Pretty much this, most of the application feels generic but take that as you will. -1 from me.

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Re: MuFussa pred app - Than-guan H'chak

Post by Symbiosis » 28 Dec 2018, 19:34

Bring up that post count, brotha!

The story could use some TLC, as well. I'm going to give this a -1 but encourage you to spend the next couple months focusing on increasing your presence on the forums and when its time to submit your story make sure to go over it with a few Pred players if they'll give you some time to review it.
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Re: MuFussa pred app - Than-guan H'chak

Post by Emeraldblood » 29 Dec 2018, 20:14

Better luck next time on the new forums.

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