Ch'hkt-a'Thwei (hyper-active blood)

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Ch'hkt-a'Thwei (hyper-active blood)

Post by Jay Burns » 17 Sep 2016, 16:18

Byond ID:Jay Burns

Marine Name (so we know who you are, if you play alien mostly, state that here):Jay 'Xeno' Burns.

Name of the character you want whitelisted (The name your predator will use. This must match your in-game predator name): Ch'hkt-a'Thwei.

Are you familiar with the Predator Code Of Honor?: yes.

Character background (A very BRIEF description of your predators background): Ch'hkt-a'Thwei could never be still, as a youngling he would always fidget and look for new things to do that is how he got his name. As he got older he would fidget less and pay more attention to things, but there was always one thing that captivated him... Blood, whenever he saw that strange liquid that comes out of living organisms, he would go into a frenzy, not paying attention to anything and only focusing on it, he would do his damnedest to try to get more.

How do you intend to play your predator (as in, describe HOW you will act/play your predator. This will weigh HEAVILY and frequently breaking from this MAY result in removal)?: i would like to play my pred as a little hyper-active but not murderboning, hyper-active as in just wandering around the place not really keeping focused on one thing (to an extent of course) also i would like to be more focused on duelling then hunting but i will still hunt a bit,another thing is if my character sees blood he might go into a frenzy attacking all nearby creatures (to an extent, i wont kill injured marines or xenos) and will coat his weapons in blood (using /me probably) or collecting it , lastly is if the xenos are getting hammered or the marines, i'm gonna help out the side that is losing just to make things a bit more interesting on a side note if xenos are getting slaughtered but they attacked me earlier i would not help out, same goes for marines.

Why should we whitelist you?: i feel like im quite an active player in the community and fairly well liked, i would like to make rounds more interesting for everyone involved, also i have been playing for quite sometime, know all the rules and wont abuse powers given to me.

Have you been banned from CM in the last month for any reason (we will check, and lies may result in immediate denial)?: no.

Are you currently banned from any other servers and if so, why?: nope.

Do you understand that any player - donor or otherwise - can have their whitelist status revoked should they break our rules or disobey the Predator Code of Honor?: yes.

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Re: Ch'hkt-a'Thwei (hyper-active blood)

Post by Casany » 17 Sep 2016, 20:32

really, REALLY small backstory... I mean, ive seen you in game and your great at that RP stuff the kids are into now a-days but the app just isnt up to par with the other apps that have been accepted.
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Re: Ch'hkt-a'Thwei (hyper-active blood)

Post by Boltersam » 18 Sep 2016, 04:09

This really isn't up to standard. Staff or not, the application isn't good enough.


Grammar is also extremely lacking here.

-1.

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Re: Ch'hkt-a'Thwei (hyper-active blood)

Post by Iatots » 18 Sep 2016, 04:58

Figured the OOC memester from yesterday would call itself hyper-active.
The application is kinda subpar as already said, but I want to focus more on your main aspect: the frenzy.
Is it just a pred high on blood like a child would be high on sugar?
Are you trying to marry the concept of wanton murder with the server rules? I really don't get what their child is supposed to be.
Will blood make you go berserk on your opponent, forgoing your defence in favor of pummeling attacks, or will you just run around in circles screaming and foaming at the mouth?
Overall it needs much more work.


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Re: Ch'hkt-a'Thwei (hyper-active blood)

Post by LordeKilly » 18 Sep 2016, 10:08

Yeah, i'm with bolter here, It's not up to standards with other applications that have been accepted.
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Re: Ch'hkt-a'Thwei (hyper-active blood)

Post by Jay Burns » 19 Sep 2016, 19:09

Heh no one has denied it yet so I'm in right? Nah just kidding to be honest I know this is quite a lacklustre app, but I couldn't really think of anything, anyway thank you all for your feedback and also another 3 months to work on a pred app.

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Re: Ch'hkt-a'Thwei (hyper-active blood)

Post by Feweh » 20 Sep 2016, 11:56

This really isnt onpar with other accepted APPs

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Re: Ch'hkt-a'Thwei (hyper-active blood)

Post by zskninoh » 24 Sep 2016, 12:18

As I've only had positive experience with Jay it pains me to say that I'm giving a -1 here. As stated previously this app just isn't up to the standards that we hold the other accepted applications to. Aside from quite a few grammatical errors, the backstory is lacking, and I'm just not sure the hyper-activity/frenzy aspect would fit with a Yautja in CM.
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Re: Ch'hkt-a'Thwei (hyper-active blood)

Post by Feweh » 24 Sep 2016, 14:16

This is denied, it's not up to par with our accepted apps.

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