Hello Bluefor, apologies for the late post, but here's my review since I've also assist you for this app,
From what I've seen of this, you've pretty much done exactly what's asked of you. If I'd be honest you seem to have downplayed your position in the community, as you are (imo) a common person to find on both the server and on discord. You're a pleasure to play with and an excellent roleplayer (when you choose to be) that's why I strongly disagree with Cheng as well.
As for the story you posted, you've done one thing which I want all future predator applications to be:
S H O R T.
I feel a large reason many predator players don't actually comment/review some of these applications is because the stories are too fucking long. But I'm glad yours is not.
You aren't meant to be writing a novel, or anything of the sort, just trying to show that you are competent with the medium, understand most of the lore, and are capable of making something that sounds like it could translate to roleplay well. I'm pretty fond of your story, actually, though it lacks any real 'information' other than your predator's theme, it does not explore their personality, fighting style, etc. But those can be discovered during play/adjusted based on what you feel like doing for that particular round.
Probably the largest gripe I have with this app is just the name of your pred. It's not even that it isn't 'predatory' or whatnot (just my own opinion) , it's just that it's so edgy. It's not a complaint, but something that kinda reminds me of the Le'Pro default predator name.
Overall, I'd love to have you join the hunt, and I look forward to you being disappointed by the lack of craftable shit preds have.
+1